Christie Towne
Breaton
EWC 4U
Tuesday March 10th, 2015
The
True Untold Stories of the E.R
The name’s Er, at least that’s what
it says on my name plate, but my friends call me E. I’ve been here for years. Yeah, I guess you could say I’ve seen it all. I’m the salvation people seek at any sign of
trouble. Whenever you need help, you
usually end up paying me a visit. The
sirens sing and the coloured lights flash as you’re rushed inside my doors in a
hectic panic and I’m always the one trying to help and make everything better,
but people never stay with me for longer then a night and I’m sick of it! Every time a new friend enters my doors they
never stay. I’m lucky if I see them for
all of two minutes before they’re rushed out of my back doors, down the endless
hallways that lead who knows where. The
only time people come to me is when they need my help and I just can’t take it
anymore. I’m putting my foot down.
But hey, let’s backtrack for a second
here. I never used to be like this. I used to be happy helping people. People would come to me in the dark hours of
the night just to seek my help and tell me about the problems that they were
having in their lives. It was an honour
really, at first, and I was good at helping people so they always kept coming
back. Playing psychiatrist for an entire
region isn’t exactly easy you know. I
have needs too! But recently I’ve
realized that none of my so called friends are ever here when I need somebody
to talk to. Like when it rains too much
and I’m having a bad roof day, or when my friends park their little cars too
close to me, or when this one asshole bird sings really loudly, while really
close to me! I just wish I had somebody
to talk to on off days like that; like seriously is that too much to ask for.
Does nobody realize how hard my life really is?
Being used and walked all over isn’t
the thing that gets to me the most though. I mean I’d be okay with helping people like
this if they at least said thank you every once in a while. I do a lot for people. Like John last week,
fixed him right up. Nobody will ever
know about his freak bowling accident, apart from the few stitches down his
chin. He was as good as new. Or that clumsy redneck who fell up the stairs
last week. I just gave her a sling for
three days and now she’s brand new again. I enjoy helping my friends, I really do, but
it makes me so mad when they come to me seeking my help and some of them don’t
even talk to me! They just lay there as they’re carried on their chariot out my
back doors down those hallways again. But no, that’s not even the worst
part. They’re always followed by a
parade of people, and these people never smile. They come, they sit there, they say nothing,
and they leave. I’ll never understand
it, and since I don’t see my job description changing anytime soon, I might as
well try and make the best of this because, although my life is hard, seeing
the smiles on my friends faces after I help them is the reason why my doors are
always open.
This POV piece was great because it was an unusual object choice. It was great also having a birds eye view of the actions of the patients and family. The one thing i could suggest is some sprucing up of the language to make it a little more exciting. Great piece!
ReplyDeleteIt was good. Liked the uniqueness of the subject matter. Could have been more interesting, or exciting, but was deep all the same.
ReplyDeleteIt was good. Liked the uniqueness of the subject matter. Could have been more interesting, or exciting, but was deep all the same.
ReplyDeleteIt was a very funny and interesting take on an ER experience. I enjoyed it a lot!
ReplyDeleteI liked the unique character for a POV. I really would like to know more about that clumsy redneck character though. ;) While presenting I would just focus on being a little louder. Other than that it was very funny and cool to see the other view of the ER room
ReplyDeleteI particularly enjoyed the "chariot" and "parade" imagery because they don't seem to fit in the E.R. I would suggest working on your presentation in the future, just to be a bit louder. Great job, though!
ReplyDeleteThis point of view was very interesting because it was different from the rest of the POV pieces in the sense that the rest were relatively smaller objects. It was great that you described the activity in the ER in such an unexpected way. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI never thought I would read a piece written from the perspective of the ER but it was very interesting. I would've liked to hear more about some of the patients that were admitted, but overall good job!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Jillian, I would have liked to hear more about the patients in the ER but, the perspective was very well worked and believable. Also, there was very strong imagery and that made it all the better. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis characterization is amazing. I can literally hear the distinct voice of the "er" by the second sentence. The lively nature of the emergency room is not quite as sassy as I would expect, but even better. I wish there was more of this, I feel like I could read a whole novel of patient stories through this perspective. GOOD JOB!
ReplyDeleteVery unique for a POV. Definitely engaging to listen to and read. Title could have been a little more creative, but other than that the it was a strong piece. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
ReplyDelete-Andrew H